Copy: pare product claims to what we can certify, cut rule-of-three cadence, record arch 10 §10

src/app/components/AboutModal.tsx

@@ -47,9 +47,8 @@ export function AboutModal() {
           v<span className={styles.version}>{__APP_VERSION__}</span>
         </p>
         <p className={styles.body}>
-          A local-first workspace for authoring, organizing, and previewing Vega-Lite charts. Edit
-          JSON, see the chart update live, and keep a personal library of snippets — with no
-          account, no server, and full offline support.
+          A local-first workspace for authoring and organizing Vega-Lite charts. Edit the JSON,
+          watch it render live, and keep a personal library of snippets.
         </p>
       </section>
 
@@ -74,17 +73,18 @@ export function AboutModal() {
       <section className={styles.section}>
         <h3 className={styles.heading}>Privacy</h3>
         <p className={styles.body}>
-          Astrolabe runs entirely in your browser. Your snippets, datasets, and settings are stored
-          locally and never leave your machine.
+          Astrolabe runs in your browser. Your snippets, datasets, and settings are stored locally
+          on your device — there&rsquo;s no server to send them to.
         </p>
         <ul className={styles.list}>
-          <li>No account, no sign-in, no server-side storage.</li>
-          <li>The app runs no analytics or tracking — no cookies, no telemetry, no profiling.</li>
+          <li>No account or sign-in.</li>
           <li>
-            The only outbound network requests are ones you create: URL-sourced datasets you add
-            yourself.
+            The app itself runs no analytics or tracking. Its host (Cloudflare) records standard,
+            aggregate traffic like any web server — not your library or the charts you build, which
+            stay in your browser.
           </li>
-          <li>After the first load, the app works fully offline.</li>
+          <li>The only outbound requests are ones you make: datasets you load from a URL.</li>
+          <li>After the first load, the app works offline.</li>
           <li>
             Use the header&rsquo;s import / export buttons to move your library between devices.
           </li>

src/app/components/Onboarding.tsx

@@ -137,8 +137,8 @@ export function Onboarding() {
       <div className={styles.inner}>
         <h2 className={styles.title}>Welcome to Astrolabe</h2>
         <p className={styles.tagline}>
-          A local library for your Vega-Lite charts — authored as JSON, rendered live, and kept on
-          your device.
+          A local library for your Vega-Lite charts — write the spec as JSON, watch it render live,
+          and keep it all on your device.
         </p>
 
         <div className={styles.ctaRow}>

src/app/feedback.ts

@@ -1,10 +1,10 @@
 /**
  * Project feedback channel.
  *
- * There is no server and no tracker (see the About modal — no telemetry of any
- * kind); feedback is a plain email the user composes and sends from their own
- * client. The address is a Cloudflare Email Routing alias that forwards to the
- * author, so it can be retired without exposing or churning a personal inbox.
+ * The app sends no telemetry of its own (see the About modal); feedback is a
+ * plain email the user composes and sends from their own client. The address is
+ * a Cloudflare Email Routing alias that forwards to the author, so it can be
+ * retired without exposing or churning a personal inbox.
  *
  * Shared by the Support modal and the About modal — a contact address is worth
  * a single source of truth so the two surfaces can't drift.

src/landing/Landing.tsx

@@ -369,8 +369,7 @@ export function Landing(): ReactNode {
           </h1>
           <p>
             Astrolabe is a local studio for Vega-Lite. Write a spec by hand or build one by
-            clicking, give it a theme, and keep all your charts in one library — in the browser,
-            with no account and no server.
+            clicking, give it a theme, and keep all your charts in one searchable library.
           </p>
           <div className={styles.heroCta}>
             <a className={`${styles.btn} ${styles.btnPrimary}`} href="/app/">
@@ -399,8 +398,8 @@ export function Landing(): ReactNode {
             </h2>
             <p className={styles.capP}>
               The editor is Monaco with the Vega-Lite schema loaded, so you get validation,
-              autocompletion, and inline docs without going online. Each chart keeps a draft and a
-              published version: edit the draft, publish when it's ready, revert when it isn't.
+              autocompletion, and inline docs without going online. Each chart keeps an editable
+              draft alongside a published version you can revert to.
             </p>
             <p className={styles.capP}>
               If you'd rather not start from JSON, the builder works from the kind of chart you
@@ -426,7 +425,7 @@ export function Landing(): ReactNode {
           <div className={styles.capText}>
             <div className={styles.capEyebrow}>One library</div>
             <h2 className={styles.capH}>
-              Every chart you make <b>stays</b>, with the data behind it.
+              Every chart you make is <b>saved</b>, with the data behind it.
             </h2>
             <p className={styles.capP}>
               Store a dataset once and reference it by name from as many charts as you want. Rename
@@ -434,8 +433,8 @@ export function Landing(): ReactNode {
             </p>
             <p className={styles.capP}>
               Load data by pasting CSV or JSON, or by fetching a URL. You can also lift inline data
-              out of a spec into a shared dataset. Search, sort, and duplicate as the collection
-              grows.
+              out of a spec into a shared dataset. Search and sort as the collection grows, and
+              duplicate a snippet to start a variant.
             </p>
           </div>
           <div className={styles.shot}>
@@ -599,17 +598,16 @@ export function Landing(): ReactNode {
             Your charts are <b>yours.</b>
           </h2>
           <p className={styles.creedLede}>
-            Astrolabe runs in your browser and stores everything locally — no account, no server.
-            What it produces is ordinary Vega-Lite JSON, so you can read it, edit it in other tools,
-            or keep it long after you've stopped using Astrolabe.
+            Astrolabe runs in your browser, and what it makes is ordinary Vega-Lite JSON — read it,
+            edit it in other tools, or take it elsewhere whenever you want.
           </p>
           <div className={styles.creedGrid}>
             <div>
               <span className={styles.creedKey}>private</span>
-              <h3>Stays on your machine</h3>
+              <h3>Local to your browser</h3>
               <p>
-                Charts, data, and themes are saved in your browser. Install it and it works with no
-                connection.
+                Charts, data, and themes are saved in this browser, and it keeps working offline
+                once installed.
               </p>
             </div>
             <div>
@@ -624,8 +622,8 @@ export function Landing(): ReactNode {
               <span className={styles.creedKey}>yours</span>
               <h3>Set up your way</h3>
               <p>
-                Two ways to author, your own fonts and themes, your own library. Arrange it to match
-                how you work.
+                Author by hand or by clicking, with your own fonts and themes. Arrange the library
+                to match how you work.
               </p>
             </div>
           </div>